Posted by: Autumn | November 12, 2008

A Candle in the Mist

Hide And Seek – Part IV

 

 

Telephone rang, keyboard dit dit ditting,

printer vomited paper after paper,

rain washed off footprints from the catwalk

and minds paused to re-assess the puzzle,

counting the sides to the polygon.

Gloom invaded the office like a virus

and people, hiding their cough, examined

the future like a specimen,

I wait like a candle in the mist

for the rain to stop and I can see

who will pass the light through the prism.

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The rest of the series can be read here. 


Responses

  1. This is excellent Autumn. What a unique take on the prompt. Evocative and succinct.

  2. Geraldine – you got to this before I could post it to Selma’s searchengine fiction site 🙂 Thanks for your encouraging comments.

    Re: my avatar (I think I read somewhere on your comments – thanks) – it’s sort of a self portrait.

  3. I love this! Seems like a prose poem to me, and there are so many excellent lines “…keyboard dit dit ditting…” and “…people, hiding their cough, examined the future like a specimen…” are my favorites. I also love how compact and crisp this is – there seems no wasted words at all. Really nice – thanks for the great read!

  4. I enjoyed reading your poem, Autumn. Thanks for posting it. DavidM

  5. ‘Examined the future like a specimen’ is such a brilliant line. There is such precision in this but also such vividness in the imagery. You really can write!

  6. Kayt, thanks for stopping by to read and for your kind compliments.

    David, thanks for stopping by again and leaving your comments. Glad you enjoyed the poem.

    Selma, thanks for your kind compliments and continued support. Appreciate it.

    Cheers all,
    Autumn


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